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"I've put on seven ugly, fat, sloppy, slobby pounds and I don't have anything I can wear. I'm beginning to as look as slobby as I feel."
Anonymous.1971. Go ask alice. Simon pulse inc. United States of America
Hey Ms. McNeeley :)! I just thought that I would get this out of the way. Anyway, I chose this quote of writing because I thought that the person saying this described the pounds that she gained very well. She didn’t just say “I gained seven pounds". I mean, wouldn't that just be boring. But she describe the pounds that she gained in a way that you can kind of feel them on your own body.
Again, my italics WOULD NOT WORK!!! Does anyone know how to use the italics on here?
“It was then past midnight. The cottages were all dark. A single faint light gleamed out from the hallway of the house. There was no sound abroad except the hooting of an old owl in the top of a water-oak, and the everlasting voice of the sea, that was not uplifted at that soft hour. It broke like a mournful lullaby upon the night.”
Chopin, K. (1899). The Awakening. New York, NY: Random House, Inc.
This paragraph is extremely descriptive and the imagery is very strong. Imagery can evoke powerful images in reader’s minds. I want the people reading my writing to picture the images I write of clearly in their minds. When readers experience good imagery it makes the reading more enjoyable and eye-opening.
"How strange this is! And for this we are to be thankful. That they should marry, small as is their chance of happiness, and wretched as is his character, we are forced to rejoice!"
Austen, J. (1813). Pride and Prejudice. New York, NY: Fine Creative Media, Inc.
I chose this quote because when a person reads it they can immediately determine the time period (which is a big part of the story) and the imagery. I also think it is a good example of "quality not quantity". I could use this in my writing to make it short but interesting.
“’Uncle ain’t brought me none yet. A peck ain’t enough to can. He say he got two bushels for me. ‘Triflin´.’ ‘ Oh, he all right.’ ‘ Sho he all right. Everybody all right. ´Cept Mamma. Mamma the only one ain’t all right. Cause she didn’t love us.’”
Morrison,T.(1973).Sula. New York: A Division of Random House, Inc.
I chose this paragraph because the dialogue is so strong and it hits you with such a fierce feeling how the person is talking to one another. You can tell whether they are from the north, south or anywhere with the way someone speaks. I would use this in my writing to develop my character so the reader will know more and could connect with not only their personality but get an idea of what kind of character they are.
"Love is something like the clouds that were in the sky, before the sun came,” she replied. Then in simpler words than these, which at the time I could not understand she explained: “You cannot touch the clouds, you know but you feel the rain and know How glad the flowers and the thirsty earth are to have it after a hot day. You cannot touch love either, but you feel the sweetness that it pours into everything."
Keller, H. (1976). The story of my life. Cutchogue, NY: Buccaneer Books, Inc.
I chose this passage because I like the way Anne Sullivan tried to explain what love is to Helen. She you a lot of good examples to try to help Helen understand what love is.
I think that I would use this in my writing make my reader more interested by having good examples about something that can’t be explained in words like in this case love.
"In Forever, The Land of the immortals, the first snowflake is always silver.Father Christmas watched it swirl and twist from the heavens.It lay, shimmering, on the great crystal stairs that led to the palace. and then the rest came, just a few at first, before dozens and hundreds and thousands spiraled through the air in a lacy ballet."
Ryan, B. (2004). The Legend of Holly Claus. New York, NY: HarperCollins Publishers., Inc.
I chose this piece because it draws attention to such a simple action. The author could have easily said "It Snows." however the author used delicate word choice to better present the setting. In my writing I will use more delicate word choice to describe the setting and my characters therefore creating better imagery for my readers as the author has done.
-By Brionna Hall
"The water thundered into her ears, forced itself down her throat, and burned its way into her nose, her lungs, her brain."
Draper, S. 1999. Romiette and Julio. New York, NY.
I chose this sentence, because I loved how the author used so much description.
“He went to school to learn how to kill me.The girl who got him fired.The Israeli girl who ruined his life.Seven other people were killed instead. A single mother of two. A computer programmer.Two college students.A grandmother and her four-year old grandson sharing ice cream.And Dov, my boyfriend, my heart,who was there waiting for me.
I wonder if the Palestinian bomber would be pleased that it turned out this way. A tooth for a tooth.An eye for an eye.
I ruined his life.So he ruined mine"
Stein,T.(2005).Light Years.New York,New York:Random House Inc.
I chose this passage because it shows the hatred the Palestinian bomber had for the girl. The author did these by taking a simple problem in the bomber‘s life a ,getting fired, and taking this anger to the next level, murder. When the author did this, it made you want to read more and see what the bomber might do to the girl. I would us this form of writing because it keeps the reader’s attention ,keeps the reader reading the story, and the reader can get the emotions the characters are having or going through.
"He wore a somewhat loud checked suit, a pink shirt, and a flashy tie-pin, and was rolling something round his tongue as he entered the dining-car. He had a big, fleshy, coarse-featured face, with a good-humored expression."
[APA] Christie, A. (1934). Murder on the Orient Express.
New York:Penguin Group.
This passage is not only very descriptive, but it tells about the character of Mr. Hardman. It exaggerates in order to make a point about how he looks. In my writing, I could use exaggerations to describe my characters, as well as to inform readers about their disposition.
"Wind swept across blorykieak mmoorland, carrying with it flurries of rain. The tough grass was sodden and waterhad burst t he banks of a stream, spreading into a wide pool; its surface bubbled as raindrops splashed into it."
Hunter, E. (2008). The Power of Three: Long Shadows-Warriors. New York, NY:Harper Collins Publishers
I chose this passage, because it created SOO much imagery in me, that i felt like I was there with whoever was there [this actually turned out to be a dream] and that I could feel the wind blowing at me from all sides with droplets of rain in each gust. If I were to be able to put this mush imagery in my readers as Erin Hunter does in her books, I could write "NY Best-Sellers."
--Hendley--
My Italics are, once again not workinfg I don't know if they are just not compatible with my computer, or what, but the computer will not let me leave the page because the signs aren't right. [?]
Ok, I don't know WHAT happened, but that word is supposed to be "bleak" and "moorland" is supposed to have one m.
Sorry!
--Hendley--
"...Will lost everyone but your Aunt Eva.A family of eight all but wiped out.She sighed again but Hannah suspected there was little sympathy in that sigh.It was more like punctuation.Instead of putting periods at the ends of sentences,her mother sighed."
Yolen.K.(1990).The Devil's Arithmetic.New York, NY: Puffin Books.
I chose this passage because of the simile the author uses and because it motivates me to use more similes in my writings and not just little broad similies.
my italics won't work
“She was beautiful, for a human- long hair nearly the precise color of black ink, charcoaled eyes. Floor- length white gown, the kind women used to wear when this world was younger. Lace sleeves belled out around her slim arms. Around her neck was a thick silver chain, on which hung a dark red pendant the size of a baby’s fist.”
Clare, Cassandra. City of Bones. Simon Pulse ink: New York, New York, 2007.
I chose this passage because of hoe visual it is. In my mind I can actually see this girl, and character development is so import. The author could have just said that there was a girl with black hair and a red necklace, but they went into so much deeper with saying the color of her eyes, her clothes, and her necklace. They compared things that we look at everyday (charcoal and eyes) to really give us such a great detail. I could use this in my writing for my character growth and imagery.
-Samantha Martin
"He jumped down from the terrace. The sand was thick over his black shoes and the heat hit him. He became concious of the weight of his clothes, kicked his shoes off fiercely and ripped off each stocking with its elastic garter in a single moment.Then he leapt back on the terrace, pulled off his shirt, and stood there among the skull-like coconuts with green shadows from the palms and the forrest sliding over his skin. He undid the snake-clasp of his belt, lugged off his shorts and pants, and stood there naked, looking at the dazzling beach and the water."
Golding, W. (1954)Lord of the Flies. United States of America: The Putnam Publishing Group.
I chose this paragraph because it's description is incredible. It is so vivid that I feel I am watching this boy.I can see the beach in my mind, and this one paragraph makes me want to read more and more.
"We were sitting there in silence when the door opened, and a young lady came in. She was rather above the middle height, slim, with dark hair and eyes, which seemed the darker against the absolute pallor of her skin. I do not think that I have ever seen such deadly paleness in a woman's face. Her lips, too, were bloodless, but her eyes were flushed with crying. As she swept silently into the room she impressed me with a greater sense of her grief than the banker had done in the morning, and it was the more striking in her as she was evidently a woman of strong character, with immense capacity for self-restraint."
MLA Citation
Doyle, Arthur. The Adventures of Sherlock Holmes . New York: Barnes and Nobles, Inc., 1974
I chose this passage because I believe it shows how descriptions can go beyond just physical attributes and describe personality traits. The way the author describes the character in the passage as "a woman of strong character" and as having an "immense capacity for self-restraint" shows how he is able to, from the very first time when you read about the character, tell you about their personalities as well as their appearances. I would implement this in my writing by including in my descriptions of characters certain traits that seem to be implied by their appearance.
"With drooping tail and shivering body, very forlorn indeed, he aimlessly circled the tent. Suddenly the snow gave way beneath his fore legs and he sank down. Something wriggled under his feet. He sprang back, bristling and snarling, fearful of the unseen and unknown. But a friendly little yelp reassured him, and he went back to investigate. A Whiff of warm air ascended to his nostrils, and there, curled up under the snow in a snug ball, lay Billee. He whined placatingly, squirmed and wriggled to show his good will and intentions."
London, Jack. The Call Of The Wild. New York, New York: Fine Creative Media, 2003.
I chose this passage because it uses lots of vivid verbs. It really helps me picture the scene in my head when I read all the vivid verbs the author uses. I could use this in my writting to keep what I'm writting interesting instead of just using plain old boring verbs.
“The cold passed reluctantly from the earth, and the retiring fogs revealed an army stretched out on the hills, resting. As the landscape changed from brown to green, the army awakened, and began to tremble with eagerness at the noise of rumors. It cast its eyes upon the roads, which were growing from long troughs of liquid mud to proper thoroughfares. A river, amber-tinted in the shadow of its banks, purled at the army's feet; and at night, when the stream had become of a sorrowful blackness, one could see across it the red, eyelike gleam of hostile camp-fires set in the low brows of distant hills." I chose this passage from the book because it had much detail and had word that I feel that I could use in my writing from now on.
"Si, con piacere, piccolo amico." The woman nodded. She put the broom down. "I spend many year in London. I speak good English. Who can I do?"
Alex pointed at the building. "What is this place?" "It is the Ca’ Vedova." She tried to explain. "Ca’… you know… in Venice we say Casa. It means ‘palace.’ And Vedova…?" She researched for the word. "It is the Palace of the Widow. Ca’ Vedova."
Horowitz, Anthony. Scorpia. 345 Hudson Street, New York, New York 10014, U.S.A.: Penguin Group, 2004. [MLA]
I chose this passage, because I thought the dialogue was really cool how they kind of described the woman by her dialogue, because of how she responded. Another thing I liked about this passage is that they used another language. I thought that was a really awesome idea. I might even use it in my own writing.
"Crank, you see isn't any ordinary monster.It's like a giant octopus, weaving its tentacles not just around you, but through you, squeezing not hard enough to kill you, but enough to keep you from reeling until you try to get away. Try, and you hunger for its grasping clutch, the way its tendrils prop you up, your need intensifying exponentially every minute you refuse to admit its being."
Hopkins,Ellen.Crank.New York,NY. Simon Pulse.2004
I chose this paragraph because I thought it was realisitc, but not literal, as Hopkins described crank (the monster) and what it does to you. I would use this type of writing in my writing to get my point across to the reader.
Before she could move, she felt an iron grip arounds her throat, and she gasped in fright, a fur gloved hand, smeeling vilely of smoke, sweat and dirt, clapped over her mouth an nose, cutting off her cry for help
John Flanagan (2006). Ranger's Apprentice Book four: The Battle for Skandia. New York, NY. Penguin Group
I pick this paragraph for the sense of surprise it brought in the boook. before this the girl was just picking some flowers and all of the sudden, WHAM! i like the affect of how the author caught me off guard.
“P.S. I got my contracts for The Outsiders on the day I graduated from high school. I spent the whole cermony thinking, This is nothing, I sold my book.
I recevied my contracts for That was then on my wedding day. I just looked at them thinking, That’s nothing, I’m getting married!”
Hinton, S.E., That Was Then, This is Now, New York, New York: Penguin Group, 1971
There isn’t anything specificly sinefecant about this passage. It was just a little P.S. after her note that authors usually put at the end of their books. I didn’t find any vivid verbs, or descirbtive adjectives. I just found this little story she told interesting. I love when I read something and then I find some background information or a story from what I just read. A behind the scenes look I like to call it. And I find this quite ironic that she got contracts for her two biggest books on the two biggest days of her life.
Jack Elliott-Gower
“I forced myself to stand up and chase the sheet of paper. It taunted me with its dance, but I outwitted it and with all my remaining strength, put my foot over it and pinned it to the sidewalk. I bent down and felt the world swirling around me as I picked it up and stood straight. Just holding it made me excited. There were words. This was a message. Someone sometime and said something and now I would know what it was.”
Pfeffer, S. B. (2006). Life as we knew it. United States of America: Harcourt.
I chose this paragraph, because it takes a small event that takes barely no time to do and stretches it, so it seems like the time is moving by slower. Pfeffer took something like pinning down (nice choice of words) a piece of paper --- something very simple --- and made it seem suspenseful. This was also a defining moment in the book, it was probably the first sign of a turning point and the foothills of a resolution. I could use this technique Pfeffer used and include it in my own writing to make it more suspenseful and action packed.
“Anger flashed through me, hot and wild. I gasped in surprise at the unexpected reaction. I’d heard of emotional instability of these human bodies, but this was beyond my ability to anticipate. In eight full lives, I’d never had an emotion touch me with such force.
I felt the blood pulse through my neck, pounding behind my ears. My hands tightened into fists.”
Meyer, S. (2008) The host New York, New York: Little Brown
This is the passage I chose because of the detailed description, and the feelings connecting to the reader with the narrator. When reading this I noticed that the character wasn’t usual, especially when reading the words “unexpected” and “human bodies”, and also knowing that anger is experienced everyday.
" In Maycomb County, it was easy to tell when someone bathed regularly, as opposed to yearly lavations: Mr. Ewell had a scalded look; as if an overnight soaking had deprived him of protetive layers of dirt, his skin appeared to be sensitive to the elements. Mayella looked as if she tried to keep clean, and I was reminded of the row of red geraniums in the Ewell yard.
Lee, H. (1960) To Kill A Mockingbird. New York, NY: HarperCollins Publishers. Inc.
I chose this passage beacuse it has excellent word choice, and great detail. The word choice includes lavations, and, even though I have never heard that word before, I can use the context clues to figure it out. That keeps the reder interested in the book because it lets them think about the book insted of just reading it. The detail is abundant, but not overpowering. Lee uses detail like "scalded look, and his skin appeared to be sensitive to the elements." These are not needed to complete the passage, but it helps make the passage interesting.If they were left out it would make the passage meaningless to the reader.
"There was not a sigh of wind. The air was drowsy with its weight of perfume. It was a sweetness that would have been cloying had the air been heavy and humid. But the air was sharp and thin. It was as starligh transmuted into the atmosphere, shot through and warmed by sunshine, and flower-drenched with sweetness."
London, J.(1979). All gold canon. Edison, NJ: Castle Books, Inc.
I chose this passage because it is such a great example of London's great writing. It makes you smell that air, feel that dryness. It is told in such a way that cannot be more descriptive.
It is a clear not quite warm September night, the obsidian sky brimming with stars. An orange harvest moon lights the semi deserted highway, and my confidence in my ability to reach home, all in one piece, grows with every mile left dissolved in my wake, buzzed to the ninth degree.
Hopkins,Ellen.Glass.New York,NY. Margaret K Mcelderry Books.2007
I choose this paragraph because it works. The words all flow in a rhythm that goes thruout the whole book. Its sounds different than a novel so it makes the book more interesting to read.
Emily giglio
Then the weirdest thing happened. Her eyes began to glow like barbecue coals. Her fingers stretched, turning into talons. Her jacket melted into large, leathery wings. She wasn't human. She was a shriveled hag with bat wings and claws and a mouth full of yellow fangs, and she was about to slice me to ribbons.
Riordan, Rick. The Lightning Theif. New York, NY: Hyperion Books, 2005.
I chose this because it just pops out of no where in the book. It caught me off guard. the next reason i chose this is because the way she is describes her is interesting.
"These are the things I'm afraid of: an airplane falling on my house, the dark, being in small places, failing my drivers test, spiders, drowning, snakes, never growing taller, never getting out of this town, alligators, war, anyone in my family dying, having my friends turn against me, eels, getting old, ghosts (including the ones that get in your car at the Haunted Mansion, letting everyone down, and never falling in love. Oh, and I'm also petrified of tornadoes."
Mass, W.(2004). Leap Day. NY,NY, Little, Brown and Company.
I chose this because, even though you are discouraged from making long lists in your writing, this helps us capture a little bit of Josie's personality. Also, I am sure the reader could relate to atleast one thing on that list, and find it quite humorous too.
I would use this if I wanted to introduce a character in an unconventional way, or when trying to help the reader understand a person a little bit more.
"Helen Cabot gradually awoke as dawn emerged from the winter darkness blanketing Boston,Massachusetts. Fingers of pale, anemic light pierced the darkness of the third floor bedroom in her parents' Louisburg Square home."
Cook, Robin. Terminal. G.P. Putnam’s Sons, 1993.
I chose this paragraph because when I read it I felt like I was in Helen Cabot's room when she woke up. I also chose this passage because Robin Cook uses a lot of metaphors which can some times be tricky to use in some writing.
“I creep along the wall quiet as dust in my canvas shoes, but they got special sensitive equipment detects my fear and they all look up, all three at once, eyes glittering out of the black faces like the hard glitter of radio tubes out of the back of an old radio.” (pg. 3)
[APA Style]
Kesey, K. (1962). One Flew Over the Cuckoo’s Nest. New York, New York: Penguin Group.
I like the use of a simile here. It gives you more description and it helps you to imagine the picture the author is trying to describe. It's an interesting simile because it's comparing eyes to radio tubes which you might not think of.
"The doll’s head fit perfectly in the pit of Spencer’s palm, the lip pursed in a flirtatious smile, the eyes a brilliant sapphire blue. A wave of Nausea went through Spencer. She’d never noticed before, but the doll looked exactly like. . .Ali."
Shepard, S. (2008). Unbelievable. New York, NY: Harper Teen Publishers
This quote gives you little bits of information that leads to a big discovery. As I got further in the quote it became clearer what the last word was going to be, because every part of the story always comes back to Ali. This is a good example of using simple words that have a big impact.
"'If you're going to create cartoon characters you can create them only from your own personality. You really can't create too much by observing other people. There's just not that much to observe'-a startling statement from one who was endlessly observing and one who had a great eye."
Michaelis, David. Schulz and Peanuts. New York, New York: Harper, 2007
I chose this passage because it has a quote that, I think, works really well within the paragraph, also I really just like that quote. In biographies you probably want to quote the person a lot and this author did a very good job with this. In my own writing I need to work on getting quotes to flow better and I can use this as an example
p.s. I know that the title is supposed to be underlined but my computer is out to get me so it didn't work.
p.p.s. Everyone from Denisse to Samantha commented on my birthday!
The first week of August hangs at the very top of summer, the top of the live-long year, like the highest seat of a Ferris wheel when it pauses in its turning. The weeks that come before are only a climb from balmy spring, and those that follow a drop to the chill of autumn, but the first week of August is motionless and hot. It is curiously silent, too, with blank white dawns and glaring noons, and sunsets smeared with too much color. Often at night there is lightning, but it quivers all alone. there is no thunder, no relieving rain. These are strange and breathless days, the dog days, when people are led to do things that are sure to be sorry for after.
Babbitt, N.B. (1975). Tuck Everlasting. Toronto, Canada: Harper & Collins.
I chose the book Tuck Everlasting because there is something about it that gives me the feeling that it was ment to take place in the south which would be southern literature. another reason is because it has become harder for me to find a book that will work for a writing captured.
Ms.McNeeley i have a question, i will probably ask you this again in 6th period if i dont get a reply before then but in APA style where you put the title of work and subtitle, if there is no subtitle would you just skip the subtitle part? that is what i did and i just wanted to be sure.
“’I guess that’s why the Jews have so many babies,” Francie thought. ‘And why they sit so quiet…waiting. And why they aren’t ashamed the way they are fat. Each one thinks they might be making the real little Jesus. That’s why they walk so proud when they know they’re that way. Now the Irish women always look so ashamed. They know they can never make a Jesus. It will be just another Mick. When I grow up and know that I am going to have a baby, I will remember to walk proud and slow even though I am not a Jew.’”
Smith, B. (1943). A tree grows in Brooklyn. New York, NY: Harper Perennial.
This passage shows an interesting way of introducing a character and her life situation and her outlook. She compares herself to the most hated ethnic group in New York at the time, and finds something to admire in them, that despite their circumstances, they are proud. I could use this in my writing to tell something about the character and to tell something about the setting, ideologically and economically. The author also uses a unique style of third person that I could emulate that gives the narration a more personal, first person tone that melds the story together smoothly as it slips from thoughts, to the past, to the present, to hopes and dreams, and back again.
" Everything inside me came undone as I stared at the tiny porcelian face of the half-vampire, half-human baby. All the lines that held me to my life were sliced apart in swift cuts, like clipping the strings to a bunch of balloons. Everything that made me who I was- my love for the dead girl upstairs, my love for my father, my loyalty for my new pack, the love for my other brothers, my hatred for my enemies, my home, snip,snip,snipand floated up into space.
I was not left drifting. A new strng held me where I was.
Not one string but a millioon. Not strings, but steel cables. A million steel cables all tying me to one thing-to the very center of the universe.
I could see that now-how the universe swirled around this one point. I'd never seen the symmetry of the universe before, but now it was plain.
The gravity of the earth no longer tied me to the place where I stood.
It was the baby girl in the blond vampire's arms that held me here now.
Renesmee."
Meyer,S.(2008) Breaking Dawn
Little, Brown and Company New York, NY
I chose this paragraph because of the emotion that Stephanie Meyer puts in her writing. It seems as if she gets really connected into her writing and that is what keeps it from being boring. I would use this in my writing whenever I write a Narrative or anything that I feel passionate about.
Constant climbed down from the fountain, stepping on to the rims of bowls of ever increasing sizes. When he got to the bottom, he was filled with the strong wish to see the fountain go. He thought of the crowd outside, how they, too, would enjoy seeing the fountain go. They would be enthralled-watching the teeny-weeny bowl at the tippy-tippy top brimming over into the next little bowl… and then the next little bowl’s brimming over into the next little bowl…and the next little bowl’s brimming over into the next bowl… and on and on, a rhapsody of brimming, each bowl singing its own merry water song. And lying under all of those bowls was the upturned mouth of the biggest bowl of them all… a regular Beelzebub of a bowl, bone dry and insatiable… waiting, waiting, waiting for that first sweet drop.
Vonnegut, Kurt. The Sirens of Titan. New York: Dell Publishing, 1959
Kurt Vonnegut knows how to describe simple objects, such as this fountain, in such a different way than anyone else that I have ever read. Maybe it’s just that he uses precious paragraphs just to describe things that most people would not waste their time doing, but I like it. If I can learn how to describe things like he does, I will be able to interest my readers just through my descriptions.
"You may write me down in history
With your bitter, twisted lies,
You may trod me in the very dirt
But still, like dust, I'll rise"
Angelou, M. Maya Angelou poems 201 East 50th Street, New York, NY 10022, Bantam, 1986.
I chose this piece (from a poem) because it contains a simile also it a metaphor. "Like dust, I'll rise", no one can really rise like dust, people are not that light and it's also comparing how easily people can recover from something that hurts to how easily dust can rise. This whole passage is saying even though people might bring you down, don't fall, rise.
(Sorry my italics did not work today, it’s the computer)
"My mind was possessed of the wisdoms of the ages, and there were no words adequate to describe them. I looked at a magazine on the table I could see it in 100 dimensions. It was so beautiful I could not stand the sight of it and closed my eyes. Immediatly I was floating to another sphere, another world, another state. Things rushed away from me and at me, taking my breath away like a drop in a fast elevator.
Anonymous.(1971). Go ask alice. Simon Pulse. New York, NY
I chose this piece beacause of her discriptive words. They stand out so strong thoughout this paragraph. I know that this could really help me with my writing I still struggle with putting descriptive words in the right places, this paragraph really shows how to make a big description sound good.
Alex
"But then, shall I never get any older than I am now? That'll be a comfort, one way -- never to be an old woman -- but then -- always to have lessons to learn!"
I think that Alice's quote is pretty bad because she should be really worried here. She is in a rabbit hole full of talking animals/lunitics and she would rather think about how much lessons stink. But before this I think it shows some growing in this character shuch as Anne Frank. She is thinking more deeper thoughts than she did earlier in the book.
Carrol,L (1948). Alice's Adventures in Wonderland New York, New york: Puffin Books
¨Her name was Shay. She had long hair in pigtails, and her eyes were too wide apart. Her lips were full enough, but she was even skinnier than a new pretty. She´d come over to New Pretty Town on her own expedition, and had been hiding here by the river for an hour.¨
Westerfeld,S.2005.Uglies.Broadway,New Yorkl:Scholastic,Inc.
This paragraph basically describes Shay as much as possible. Not only do I like how they described her but the way they also mentioned how she was at that moment. What she was doing. On just this little bit of words comes out a bundle of adjectives for Shay. This let´s me picture her in my head and that later helps me understand about who I am reading about.
Interesting Question
Don't you think?
I mean, if the supreme
being inserts a single soul
at the moment of conception,
does that essence divide
itself? Does each half then
strive to become whole
again, like a starfish
or an earthworm?
Hopkins, Ellen. Identical. New York, New York: Simon Pulse, 2008.
I like how the writer develops her characterization about the twins, who are the main characters in the book. They are looking to become one again. I like the author’s word choice and the imagery it creates. In my own writing I would like to develop a deeper meaning in my word choice.
"Nasuada could not help; she uttered a wordless cry when the knife parted her skin. The razor edge burned like a white- hot wire. Halfway through the cut, her traumatized left arm twitched. The knife swerved as a result, leaving her with a long, jagged laceration twice as deep as the others. Her breath stopped while she weathered with the agony."
Paolini, C. Brinsingr. New York, NY: Random House, inc.
I was shocked in the detail and imagery of this paragraph. Although it is kind of gross. This is a good example for my writing and how I can use it to produce mental pictures for my readers.
"It's not that funny!" he snarled. Crowley held his bruised rib and pointed at Halt. "It is! It is! You should have seen your face" he gasped. Then, to Will, he said: "Go on! Are there more verses?"
Will hesitated. Halt was glaring at Crowley, and Will--- even though he was a fully fledged Ranger, a wearer of the Silver Oakleaf and, Technically, Halt's equal rank--- knew it would be unwise to continue. Very unwise.
Flanagan, J (2008). Rangers apprentice, Book 5, The Sorcerer of the North. NY, NY. The penguin group
I picked this passage because i like how the author describes the characters feelings without using to many words. He can describe the feelings, very deeply, of three characters in about two paragraphs, and that can be a very useful trait!
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